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12/20/12 3:43pm
tmangamer399 posted a new Blog Post.
A new video game FB page... And its interactive!!!!!
11/28/12 6:25pm
tmangamer399 posted a new Blog Post.
What characters deserve to be an all star? Find out here.
tmangamer399: OK so looking back on a computer I realise its messy. But that's not how I wrote it. My phone is what I wrote of on and for some reason jumbled it up
frankhaggar972: The content is good. It just a bit....messy. Like all the text in one place. I suggest you look at how LousyTacticians lists look and take inspiration from that. Yes a KH character would be nice.
11/1/12 8:33pm
tmangamer399 posted a new Blog Post.
some things you may not know on how deathbattle works.
tmangamer399: I will try my best
caboose_-1: Fairly accurate but it's very ambiguous, a lot of the issues people have with DEATH BATTLE is the specific stuff. From what I read you're trying to say that certain fighters using certain fighting styles will have an innate advantage, but you only focus on 1 actual DB (the most controversial one at that). It might have been a bit better to expand your selection and/or pick different battles. For instance, Blanka vs Pikachu or Kratos vs Spawn or Thor vs Raiden all feature wildly different fighting styles where pretty much everyone figured one fighter had a major advantage due to their style; respectively: Blanka had size, strength, and could fight well by himself, Spawn is incredibly OP with a suit that can pretty much do anything, and Thor is a sheer powerhouse used to taking a beating and can hit harder than almost anyone in the Marvel universe. I've had conversations with others about this exact point and it has made some people upset due to the fight being unfair. Another example is Batman vs Spiderman: Spiderman's style and powers gave him such a serious advantage that Batman didn't have much of a chance for a first-time meeting. Had it been, say, Captain America then I think people would agree that the playing field would have been much more even.
So from a general point of view I think you do have a point, but you need to work on developing it and explaining your reasoning more. As far as liking it, this has potential to be pretty good as you refine your writing style more.
So from a general point of view I think you do have a point, but you need to work on developing it and explaining your reasoning more. As far as liking it, this has potential to be pretty good as you refine your writing style more.
tmangamer399: Did you like it? And do you think the info was accurate?
caboose_-1: It's all good, how would any of us get better if we didn't have a little feedback once in awhile? Hope you keep it up!
tmangamer399: Thanks everyone for the advice. I am not the writer type. I'm more of a video guy. And I see this as fun too. I just want to clear up how it work
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7/19/12 1:04pm
tmangamer399 posted a new Blog Post.
Is the first Kingdom hearts worth buying. Find out!! in this 4 part review
Elrood: If you want to make a review, there are four things that come to my mind, when I read your article.
1. You have to explain who the hell Sora is. For example. "Sora is a young boy, who lives with his friends on a small island." After that a description of his character and the people that he interacts the most with"
2. If you review the story, you are not supposed to do a full re-narration but a short plot summary. After that you have to actually review. That means you have to rate the story based on structure, execution and what not.
3. Spelling mistakes, again! You should seriously look into a tool that checks your spelling..
4. Incomplete reviews are not interesting. If you aren't done with it, don't release it. Nobody wants to keep track of a review, that has just small bits of updates. That is not to say that the idea in itself is wrong. Many reviewers split their reviews up in multiple parts, if it gets to long. That's okay. Yours on the other hand is too short to warrant any kind of segmentation.
Just being honest ;)
1. You have to explain who the hell Sora is. For example. "Sora is a young boy, who lives with his friends on a small island." After that a description of his character and the people that he interacts the most with"
2. If you review the story, you are not supposed to do a full re-narration but a short plot summary. After that you have to actually review. That means you have to rate the story based on structure, execution and what not.
3. Spelling mistakes, again! You should seriously look into a tool that checks your spelling..
4. Incomplete reviews are not interesting. If you aren't done with it, don't release it. Nobody wants to keep track of a review, that has just small bits of updates. That is not to say that the idea in itself is wrong. Many reviewers split their reviews up in multiple parts, if it gets to long. That's okay. Yours on the other hand is too short to warrant any kind of segmentation.
Just being honest ;)
7/18/12 5:26pm
tmangamer399 posted a new Blog Post.
Yes the pics are odd but my computer is being dumb right now
frankhaggar972: What Elrood said although a bit less harsh.
tmangamer399: It is no problem. Iam new at this so it is good that someone is being honest with me
Elrood: Some tips for your reviews.
1. Proofread your review two times before you publish it. You have made several mistakes. Be it grammar or spelling.
2. Stop stating the obvious. "That is all for my difficulty segment". We know that already, there is a reason why you have given each paragraph its own headline.
3. Make some kind of conclusion that summarizes your review in a few sentences.
4. Don't begin your teaser-text with making up excuses. Just don't say it. We see that there is nothing, you don't have to point it out ;) The function of a teaser is to encourage me to read your text, not the other way around.
5. If you review a sequel you have to give some kind of background so readers, that haven't played the game understand what you are saying. "he wields his blade like Sora" Who the hell is Sora? (for example).
6. Rethink your review arguments: Difficulty. So the game is even hard on easy? Well, the Hades stage and Sephiroth aren't part of the main campaign but an extra-stage, so you can't judge the overall difficulty just because of those two elements.
You make some good points but it's really hard to follow your writing if you keep on making so many spelling and grammar mistakes. Why did I name that twice? 'cause it drags your review down the most. The best advice I can give you for that is, read, read, read.
Hope I wasn't too harsh on ya ;)
1. Proofread your review two times before you publish it. You have made several mistakes. Be it grammar or spelling.
2. Stop stating the obvious. "That is all for my difficulty segment". We know that already, there is a reason why you have given each paragraph its own headline.
3. Make some kind of conclusion that summarizes your review in a few sentences.
4. Don't begin your teaser-text with making up excuses. Just don't say it. We see that there is nothing, you don't have to point it out ;) The function of a teaser is to encourage me to read your text, not the other way around.
5. If you review a sequel you have to give some kind of background so readers, that haven't played the game understand what you are saying. "he wields his blade like Sora" Who the hell is Sora? (for example).
6. Rethink your review arguments: Difficulty. So the game is even hard on easy? Well, the Hades stage and Sephiroth aren't part of the main campaign but an extra-stage, so you can't judge the overall difficulty just because of those two elements.
You make some good points but it's really hard to follow your writing if you keep on making so many spelling and grammar mistakes. Why did I name that twice? 'cause it drags your review down the most. The best advice I can give you for that is, read, read, read.
Hope I wasn't too harsh on ya ;)
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